tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post7708993426880021353..comments2023-09-22T18:24:22.356+01:00Comments on Lexi Revellian: Horrible haikuLexihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comBlogger30125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-41668929485290709142010-04-28T12:48:34.870+01:002010-04-28T12:48:34.870+01:00:D:DNighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-41269701970922221452010-04-28T11:38:54.594+01:002010-04-28T11:38:54.594+01:00The haiku is a tricky beast;
I can’t say I’m a fan...The haiku is a tricky beast;<br />I can’t say I’m a fan.<br />I’d leave them to the Japanese,<br />And stick with rhymes that scan.<br /><br />The haiku’s brief yet meaningful;<br />Some like it, some do not.<br />I must admit they leave me cold,<br />But Christine says they’re hot.Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-27770572058487979292010-04-28T02:52:39.845+01:002010-04-28T02:52:39.845+01:00Well, Lexi, you asked my opinion, in haiku form. ...Well, Lexi, you asked my opinion, in haiku form. So I gave it.<br /><br />I happen to be quite fond of writing haiku. Not that I read volumes of it, but it seems like a natural way to write poetry for me. My son read a little story about the poet Boshu (I think that was his name) who was one of the famous poets of ancient Japan, and in the story he says that the idea of haiku is to capture a little moment in time. So, yes, it's a good exercise for schoolchildren because it allows them to focus on something specific and write about it.<br /><br />Courage, like spring grass<br />Appears in startling green<br />Where least expectedNighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-6191013317801266102010-04-27T21:59:13.119+01:002010-04-27T21:59:13.119+01:00The charm of weeds, or more precisely the charm of...The charm of weeds, or more precisely the charm of the act of weed extraction (we don't spray, we pull) depends very much on two things: the state of the weather and the state of the dirt. Cool weather and yielding earth makes for a nice time spent outside in company with suburban nature. Hot weather and hard, root greedy dirt equals misery.<br /><br />Yes I would write now<br />For right now the pen it calls<br />So does blasted jobAlan Hutchesonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03880999192085868408noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-67203383897983612762010-04-27T16:23:20.458+01:002010-04-27T16:23:20.458+01:00I like weeds. Even the persistent ones, like liver...I like weeds. Even the persistent ones, like liverwort and a dear little trefoil weed with tiny bright yellow flowers that you have to pull up before its seed pods explode <i>everywhere</i>...Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-71724229954301945682010-04-27T15:48:28.424+01:002010-04-27T15:48:28.424+01:00Man stoops and curses
Weeds to be pulled many weed...Man stoops and curses<br />Weeds to be pulled many weeds<br />Knees object, weeds smile<br /><br />Well, that's what I've just been doing this morning.Alan Hutchesonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03880999192085868408noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-50699542731466576212010-04-27T13:47:53.910+01:002010-04-27T13:47:53.910+01:00Yay! A funny haiku!
How delightfully inauthentic...Yay! A funny haiku! <br /><br />How delightfully inauthentic.Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-76827502882891414512010-04-27T11:12:50.324+01:002010-04-27T11:12:50.324+01:00Man in toilet
Has greater need of paper
Than poet....Man in toilet<br />Has greater need of paper<br />Than poet.Sandra Pattersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00619456126272467803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-26721696510890552092010-04-27T07:20:52.826+01:002010-04-27T07:20:52.826+01:00Hmmm...Christine, I suspect that is rather a good ...Hmmm...Christine, I suspect that is rather a good effort.<br /><br />It deserves a better venue than my haiku-hostile blog.Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-84420018709157401362010-04-27T02:07:42.015+01:002010-04-27T02:07:42.015+01:00In just a few words
The universe unfolding
Like bu...In just a few words<br />The universe unfolding<br />Like butterfly wingsNighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-616872390359184572010-04-26T21:01:46.728+01:002010-04-26T21:01:46.728+01:00Richard, I think you have just invented a new poet...Richard, I think you have just invented a new poetic form - the rhyming haiku!<br /><br />I must say, it's an improvement...Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-25664803886164011922010-04-26T20:04:43.672+01:002010-04-26T20:04:43.672+01:00Haiku, like bad cheese,
Or a hiccup, or a sneeze,
...Haiku, like bad cheese,<br />Or a hiccup, or a sneeze,<br />Lexi--does not please.Richardhttp://www.divorcelawyerinaugustageorgia.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-81179449207022994592010-04-26T17:50:55.564+01:002010-04-26T17:50:55.564+01:00Well, at least it's easy to remember...Well, at least it's easy to remember...Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-32272980766913564402010-04-26T17:44:49.755+01:002010-04-26T17:44:49.755+01:00That was great! It is now my all time favorite po...That was great! It is now my all time favorite poem.Plain Janehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17925232966242274371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-64550431436334360532010-04-26T17:24:02.483+01:002010-04-26T17:24:02.483+01:00Apparently, a haiku can consist of only one word, ...Apparently, a haiku can consist of only one word, ideal for the truly lazy student. The example given was:<br /><br /><i>Tundra</i><br /><br />I'm a little underwhelmed.Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-36899045842848856012010-04-26T17:09:04.078+01:002010-04-26T17:09:04.078+01:00I did like the limerick, but I was too lazy as a s...I did like the limerick, but I was too lazy as a student to do anything that seemed challenging. I could handle three lines.Plain Janehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17925232966242274371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-81533668526782485982010-04-26T17:05:57.482+01:002010-04-26T17:05:57.482+01:00Congrats on the winning haiku!
But Jane, there ar...Congrats on the winning haiku!<br /><br />But Jane, there are exact rules for writing a rhyming couplet, a limerick or a Shakespearian sonnet - and I'd say these are more fun, because more challenging.Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-88435371112379294532010-04-26T17:00:33.918+01:002010-04-26T17:00:33.918+01:00I liked it as a student because it had rules that ...I liked it as a student because it had rules that were exact. Given a specific assignment I was able to comply. I also liked it because my haiku in third grade was picked for some school-wide award. They successfully convinced me that I could write poetry.Plain Janehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17925232966242274371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-86966584223212775172010-04-26T12:08:14.542+01:002010-04-26T12:08:14.542+01:00Well you did call the post Horrible Haiku!
I didn...Well you did call the post Horrible Haiku!<br /><br />I didn't have any kids with me. Luckily. It interests me a great deal how a foreign culture had totally confused Santa with Jesus.Gary Corbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14759372069119740227noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-2449995912333757862010-04-26T11:32:35.064+01:002010-04-26T11:32:35.064+01:00Gary, that's awful!
How to explain to a child...Gary, that's awful!<br /><br />How to explain to a child?Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-21542410808139053292010-04-26T11:30:43.341+01:002010-04-26T11:30:43.341+01:00Beth, I'm not saying the haiku isn't a Goo...Beth, I'm not saying the haiku isn't a Good Thing in Japan - not speaking Japanese, I can't judge.<br /><br />And I wouldn't mind pupils writing haiku and free verse, as long as they also learn to write more demanding forms. Too little is expected of children in too many schools.<br /><br />I like <i>Tattoo</i>. I'll quote a poem in return:<br /><br /><b>THE DARK CAVALIER</b><br /><br />I am the Dark Cavalier; I am the Last Lover:<br /> My arms shall welcome you when other arms are tired;<br />I stand to wait for you, patient in the darkness,<br /> Offering forgetfulness of all that you desired.<br /><br />I ask no merriment, no pretense of gladness,<br /> I can love heavy lids and lips without their rose;<br />Though you are sorrowful you will not weary me;<br /> I will not go from you when all the tired world goes.<br /><br />I am the Dark Cavalier; I am the Last Lover;<br /> I promise faithfulness no other lips may keep;<br />Safe in my bridal place, comforted by darkness,<br /> You shall lie happily, smiling in your sleep.<br /><br />Margaret WiddemerLexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-84566453079922584772010-04-26T05:08:12.931+01:002010-04-26T05:08:12.931+01:00You've put me in mind of the haiku competition...You've put me in mind of the haiku competition Rachelle Gardner ran on her blog long ago. My humble contribution:<br /><br />In Tokyo I saw<br />Nailed upon the Christian cross<br />Santa crucified<br /><br /><br />Which is true. I did indeed once see a crucified Santa in a department store in Tokyo at Christmas! I wish I'd had a camera.Gary Corbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14759372069119740227noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-11062496477919787282010-04-26T01:23:01.847+01:002010-04-26T01:23:01.847+01:00I have to say I disagree with you entirely. Haiku-...I have to say I disagree with you entirely. Haiku--and it's father form, tanka--is a beautiful art form with centuries of history. When Japan broke from the Chinese influence during the Heian Period, Japan's structured form of poetry was in and of itself a form of rebellion.<br /><br />But the haiku is really not that different in concept from the sonnet. The idea is to compact something beautiful and unique into a tightly restricted space. Sure, it sometimes leads to dribble, especially from students. But do many students make beautiful poetry in any form? <br /><br />As for free verse--some of the most beautiful poetry is free verse! Consider Ted Kooser's poem, "Tattoo" (my favorite poem):<br /><br />Tattoo<br /><br />What once was meant to be a statement—<br />a dripping dagger held in the fist<br />of a shuddering heart—is now just a bruise<br />on a bony old shoulder, the spot<br />where vanity once punched him hard<br />and the ache lingered on. He looks like<br />someone you had to reckon with,<br />strong as a stallion, fast and ornery,<br />but on this chilly morning, as he walks<br />between the tables at a yard sale<br />with the sleeves of his tight black T-shirt<br />rolled up to show us who he was,<br />he is only another old man, picking up<br />broken tools and putting them back,<br />his heart gone soft and blue with stories.<br /><br />from Delights & Shadows, Copper Canyon Press, Port Townsend, WA 2004<br /><br />http://www.tedkooser.net/excerpts/tattoo.htmlAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-40751031040354335552010-04-25T20:47:14.085+01:002010-04-25T20:47:14.085+01:00Hmm. No one's changed my mind yet. K gets extr...Hmm. No one's changed my mind yet. K gets extra Brownie points for attempting rhyming verse.<br /><br />Fairyhedgehog may be right about the worst verse rhyming - rap, for instance.<br /><br />Clair, I <i>sometimes</i> like Marmite; on hot buttered toast for tea at twilight after a winter walk, perhaps.<br /><br />Norm made me look up Pinchot, so I am now better informed. (Not sure when I'll use my new knowledge...)<br /><br />Kitty didn't mention cats or shoes - must try harder, Kitty.<br /><br />Karen - you loved studying haiku at school? I don't know what to say...Lexihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14404818053292364819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6250078125607062288.post-57784424550082642312010-04-25T20:04:16.932+01:002010-04-25T20:04:16.932+01:00Love it or hate it
Something both have in common
H...Love it or hate it<br />Something both have in common<br />Haiku and Marmite<br /><br />Excellent challenge for a Sunday evening, Lexi :)<br /><br />Best wishes, ClairClair Humphrieshttp://www.clairhumphries.comnoreply@blogger.com